The story that didnt bear ‘happily ever after’ as an epilogue.

Note: story for http://weandwords.blogspot.com/2008/07/best-in-lounge-story-writing_29.html

Few stories are less fairy-talish, they don’t deserve ‘once upon a time’ as a prelude, or for that matter a ‘happily ever after’.

It is a rainy November night, the hands of the clock unite at 12 and I leave my chair; put the knitting needles and specs on the side table, wrap the shawl around my shoulders and watch the rain droplets tracing unknown patterns on window panes, I try to follow them. I smile. I cry. The butterfly of yesteryears spread its wings and takes me to the life I once lived.

I am Alaena, I have thinning hair, reading glasses, a little towards chubby frame and I’m 67. I live in hill-view plaza, Building no 14, floor no 6 apartment no 174 A. I have been living here ever since they were constructed – a good many years ago. It is still pouring down; Novembers to me are always nostalgic.

He was Rashid Amin, a little less than 25 and a little more than 6 feet, had deep intellectual brown eyes that sometimes appeared green, a caramel colored skin, chocolate wavy hair and a very generous warm smile. He lived in the apartment right opposite to my room’s window; far enough that he could never notice me still near enough that I always knew him well – very well.

He was the most handsome and noble man of the plaza, with a square jaw and very well define features, I could have said cute but cute suits for 5 year old and he was very masculine for cute. He topped in the university majoring in accounts and was immediately taken by one of the most prestigious firm of the country. It was late that I realize that he was awfully rich too (better said, awesomely rich) living alone in the apartment and owning his father’s entire estate yet he had courteous manners (opening car door for women, holding glass door for elders and nodding, smiling and killing hearts) Every morning I would see him in his navy jogging suit, he would greet any one he pass with a smile and gentle nod and would sometimes stop to pat a young lad. He was such a healthy person I wonder if he had ever been to doctor in his life? Never – but once, and for the last time.

He was so good to be true and so unmatchable that I never dared to step ahead to know him or be friends with him. Time fleeted akin to the sand escaping from the grasp of fist. And it brought me grief. He picked his life partner, the lucky Crystal Koya and invited everyone to attend his wedding ceremony; in the flood of colors and smells the ecstatic man was sitting next to his bride, joy was dripping his eyes and smile, radiating and mesmerizing. No one noticed my tears; it was the first time I saw him from near, even less than three feet away. He was so charismatic and charming; no wonder why he was the throb of every young heart.

The minute I saw the bride, I knew she was his perfect match. I had never seen someone as beautiful as her; sleek, slender as if made of most perquisite porcelain. I came back home with a heavy heart, darkness engulfed me.

His room was theirs now. I sealed the window and the Pandora box of my hopes and flew to another city for a change. It took me three weeks to get back to normal, to accept life as it is, three weeks to lit fire to my dreams; for life then was not dreams, it was nightmare.

When I came back Sandeep, a next door neighbor by chance and a dear friend by choice, visited me. His favorite sport, after retirement, had been sitting next to his window and observing people, he hence, knew all. Who was going out with whom, who was doing what, the new borns and the deads; who were engaged and who were broken up. He, to me, was a gossip monger, a cheap local newspaper; that day we sat over the coffee and he told me about Crystal’s suicide.

Sometimes facts hit you in your pit so hard to digest, despite everything I felt so sad for her and for him. She was a schizophrenic, been hallucinated and had anhedonia, inability to experience pleasure. One random day when he was off for office she killed herself. Just like that, as killing yourself is a matter of fact.

I broke down, I cried like I had never cried and that day I realized something I never did, I loved Rashid Amin.

(part two, the main thrill is due in a week =), please wait!)

14 thoughts on “The story that didnt bear ‘happily ever after’ as an epilogue.

  1. wow…your take on the contest is really amazing! The way you have set up the tone for the next part is commendable. And some tone you have set islex…right from taking users back in time to honouring me with that gossip monger role! I owe you one!! he he…but you have created enough suspense in me to keep my fingers crossed for the second installment….you have done one thing for sure…you have just raised the bar of excellence…others(which includes me) are going to find it tough to match up to this! Cheers…well executed!

  2. Sandeep, Thankyou for these nice words sandeep. I re-read my post, when I wrote it at the elevnth hour I had no time to cook it, so I realize It is quite incoherent. I hope I do justice to the next part.

    Gunj, Thankyou 🙂

  3. wow amazing posts … no wonder ur comment on my sketch was so beautiful… i felt the way you noticed everything about her made her glorified ..thanks .. am not really great with words like u r …. but your encouragement has made me commited to do better next time .. thanks again n lovely laid out thoughts .. i stil haventread all but blogroling u .. thanks again tk care

  4. Oh!! I am Waiting for the Second Part!! Desperately :((
    Why So Much Suspense and a Half Told Story !! Who knows about tomorrow!! Post it as fast as Possible!!

    BTW I didn’t Knew that you are 67 😉

  5. Have you seem “The Hours”..
    story looks very similar to it..

    very well written, but I read to criticise, …so, I suggest while describing Rashid, try to make it inferencial from some events, so that people would make those sentences in their mind like he is rich, polite….

  6. wonderful narration…dropping in for the first time…came from Blogeratti community on rkut…loved part 1 and waiting for part 2

    P.S: Do visit my blog…hope u lik

  7. Asbah, i’m waiting and waiting for the second part, do make it a happily ever after, I’m yearning for happily ever afters.

    In lighter vein : if i was his neighbor I’d stalk him, he sounds too good to be true, tragedy et all.

  8. Ashba..i must say..Wow.
    i used to write poems only but now i got a inspiration…
    imagoine “inspiration” 😉
    i really liked the post..ur first take…awesomly written..
    looking forward for more..keep writing..
    i liked the lines “he had never been to doctor, but once and for the last time”
    good emotions..keep it up gurl…

  9. errr… I am writing. I am just trying for it to be good, which sadly it isnt going to be!

    TM, I told you the reason of a little coherency! word-limit 🙂

    Wierd, The story Has no happy end, I am sorry…

    Eman, and all, Much Thanks 🙂

  10. Asbah daaaarrrling, don’t worry, happy or sad, you just write, if it intrigues, or it makes me cry, i’ll come stalk you. Deal ? 😀

  11. CRD, hero and heroines in the story love good looking people because they are themselves 🙂

    Asbah doesnt 🙂 I have other priorities, good looks would be great as a perq though *winks*

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